A fanfic I would like to try out -_-'*FIXED*
Jul 27, 2006 12:13:03 GMT -5
Post by sakurafan on Jul 27, 2006 12:13:03 GMT -5
Hi, I'm new, and yeah, I've been doing a fanfic, and I'll post chapter 1 here. My grammer is really bad ((I'm bad with punctuations.etc)). But anyways, tell me what you think of chapter 1-the story is about Jennifer and Helen and the return of Bobby.
Chapter1:
Jennifer and Helen walked into their apartment, smiling as they carried their shopping bags inside.
"See? A little shopping made you forget about that jerk Nolan." Helen said softly.
"Yes, I guess..."
Jennifer and Nolan had been having problems in their relationship lately. Nolan wanted Jennifer to go on talk shows and on tv so she could tell the terryfying story of what happened in the Barrows Mansion.
Jennifer went towards the light swich and turned the lights on to the living room. She put the bags down on the couch and sighed.
As Helen made her way up the stairs and into her room, she sat down on the couch softly and thought to herself.
Ever since the Barrows Mansion incident, she had been thinking about Bobby-Dan's younger brother. It took a door spell to kill Dan, but what about...Bobby? Was he really dead? The question kept passing through Jennifer's mind, and it kept nagging her off course. She didnt tell this to Helen-she didnt want to worry her.
Suddenly, the lights went out. Jennifer got up quickly. She made her way to the window and saw the neighboring houses still had light.
"That's weird... I'm sure Helen payed the bill for the lights..."
Helen came down quickly. "Ugh, just our luck! I wonder why they cut our lights off..."
Suddenly, in the distance, a noise that always nagged Jennifer's ears sounded.....Scissors. Suddenly, the radio turned on, and out of nowhere, a familiar song played-a song by goblin called Phenomena like the horror movie made by Dario Argento...
Jennifer stared at Helen, who seemed a little frightened. She hadn't said a word.
"Helen...Let's get out of here..."
"Yeah, I'm with you" Jennifer and Helen made their way to the door, when suddenly, a dark figure jumped out in front of them. They moved back as the figure walked into the moonlight that shone thru the window.
The girls gasped as they stared at Scissorman.
"No, this cant be-We killed you!" Jennifer said out loud.
Scissorman jumped up and down in joy. Helen grabbed Jennifer's hand and rushed up the stairs.
The song still played as it went from a soft opera sounding song into a full upbeat sound. Helen and Jennifer ran into a room and closed the door-not that it would do any good.
Helen noticed that they had walked into the bathroom by accident. "Oh, great...I forgot there aren't any windows in the bathroom!" Jennifer could hear Helen curse under her breath.
While Helen looked for something to use on Scissorman, Jennifer took deep breaths and tried to think.
Dan was dead, so who could it be..? The only explanation is... Bobby...
Suddenly, the door broke down, and Scissorman entered, dancing joyfully.
"Helen!" Jennifer yelled.
Helen grabbed a towel and threw it over Bobbys body, making him temporarly blind. Jennifer and Helen ran past him.
The girls ran to Jennifer's room and quickly opened the window.
"You go first, Jennifer!"
Jennifer nodded and climbed out the window. She fell down roughly on the grass. She felt herself dazed. Next to her, fell Helen.
Helen got up groaning and helped Jennifer up. "Jennifer, let's go."
"To where?"
"We're going to go see Gotts..."
((I hope you liked the chapter ^_^ And for those who don't know, the song that i said played during the chapter was from the movie Phenomena, which seems to play alot in most of the scenes. lol I love that song. I dlg it and listened to it. Actually, I listened to it while writing this chapter. Anyways, hope you enjoyed it! If not, well I'll just stop from posting it here))
Chapter1:
Jennifer and Helen walked into their apartment, smiling as they carried their shopping bags inside.
"See? A little shopping made you forget about that jerk Nolan." Helen said softly.
"Yes, I guess..."
Jennifer and Nolan had been having problems in their relationship lately. Nolan wanted Jennifer to go on talk shows and on tv so she could tell the terryfying story of what happened in the Barrows Mansion.
Jennifer went towards the light swich and turned the lights on to the living room. She put the bags down on the couch and sighed.
As Helen made her way up the stairs and into her room, she sat down on the couch softly and thought to herself.
Ever since the Barrows Mansion incident, she had been thinking about Bobby-Dan's younger brother. It took a door spell to kill Dan, but what about...Bobby? Was he really dead? The question kept passing through Jennifer's mind, and it kept nagging her off course. She didnt tell this to Helen-she didnt want to worry her.
Suddenly, the lights went out. Jennifer got up quickly. She made her way to the window and saw the neighboring houses still had light.
"That's weird... I'm sure Helen payed the bill for the lights..."
Helen came down quickly. "Ugh, just our luck! I wonder why they cut our lights off..."
Suddenly, in the distance, a noise that always nagged Jennifer's ears sounded.....Scissors. Suddenly, the radio turned on, and out of nowhere, a familiar song played-a song by goblin called Phenomena like the horror movie made by Dario Argento...
Jennifer stared at Helen, who seemed a little frightened. She hadn't said a word.
"Helen...Let's get out of here..."
"Yeah, I'm with you" Jennifer and Helen made their way to the door, when suddenly, a dark figure jumped out in front of them. They moved back as the figure walked into the moonlight that shone thru the window.
The girls gasped as they stared at Scissorman.
"No, this cant be-We killed you!" Jennifer said out loud.
Scissorman jumped up and down in joy. Helen grabbed Jennifer's hand and rushed up the stairs.
The song still played as it went from a soft opera sounding song into a full upbeat sound. Helen and Jennifer ran into a room and closed the door-not that it would do any good.
Helen noticed that they had walked into the bathroom by accident. "Oh, great...I forgot there aren't any windows in the bathroom!" Jennifer could hear Helen curse under her breath.
While Helen looked for something to use on Scissorman, Jennifer took deep breaths and tried to think.
Dan was dead, so who could it be..? The only explanation is... Bobby...
Suddenly, the door broke down, and Scissorman entered, dancing joyfully.
"Helen!" Jennifer yelled.
Helen grabbed a towel and threw it over Bobbys body, making him temporarly blind. Jennifer and Helen ran past him.
The girls ran to Jennifer's room and quickly opened the window.
"You go first, Jennifer!"
Jennifer nodded and climbed out the window. She fell down roughly on the grass. She felt herself dazed. Next to her, fell Helen.
Helen got up groaning and helped Jennifer up. "Jennifer, let's go."
"To where?"
"We're going to go see Gotts..."
((I hope you liked the chapter ^_^ And for those who don't know, the song that i said played during the chapter was from the movie Phenomena, which seems to play alot in most of the scenes. lol I love that song. I dlg it and listened to it. Actually, I listened to it while writing this chapter. Anyways, hope you enjoyed it! If not, well I'll just stop from posting it here))
